Dude...is your last name really "Peeples?" That's cool.
I'll get you that feedback in a second. Let me read it...
...OK. First I'd like to state that the names and avatars of a great many people here at TNL now make a lot more sence.
I have two insignificant problems with it, J. The first is the "...you wont want to miss..." part. This particular phrase is over-used among the pros in gaming media, and it doesn't convey the sence of fun and purchase-urgency that I think you're going for.
Second is the entire last sentence. I'd just dump it if I were you. It doesn't soud right, and it brings closure to the article...which is a preview piece. You don't want closure in a preview article. You want some sence of "come on back and see what else we can uncover about it" kind of hanging line, and, " Hopefully, as the release draws near, more information will be revealed about the game," works great to that end.
Just some suggestions, and remember, you asked me.![]()


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