Struggle for Supremacy

[Scourge]

I couldn't read Gohron's story. Eight inch thick paragraphs of horrible, horrible grammar kill my brain cells.

[Gohron]

3 years ago.

Edit: And if you feel the same way now, tell me. My grammar usage has never been great but has gotten slightly better.

I'm not posting this up to inflate my ego.

[Scourge]

Okay, I just read the first paragraph of the new update and you don't seem to know what a run on sentence is or how to use punctuation.

[Cowutopia]

That's pretty much how I felt.

[Gohron]

Okay, I just read the first paragraph of the new update and you don't seem to know what a run on sentence is or how to use punctuation.

Well, keep reading it if at all possible and maybe PM me some better ways to write certain parts.

[Cowutopia]

Just buy a book on grammar and a book on editing and edit yourself.

If I were a teacher I'd have "Rewrite" and "See me" written on the page.

[Gohron]

Just buy a book on grammar and a book on editing and edit yourself.

If I were a teacher I'd have "Rewrite" and "See me" written on the page.

I used to get high A's on papers when I was in college

Grammar aside (which I knew wasn't that great to be begin with) I'd like to get some opinions on the story and atmosphere though, that's mainly what I was looking for.