Shenmue II

Been busy working on other pieces of writing and other reviews.

You are a coward.

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Originally posted by Jeremy
Been busy working on other pieces of writing and other reviews.

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Do you feel obligated to write? I mean, are you writing for you or for an audience? Is it an addiction you have or do you feel it serves a purpose? If you are writing to be read {and why else would you be writing?) then please, work on making the Shenmue II review good *before* you put anything else up.

It's ridiculous that you ignore people who would help you. Think about why these people, myself included, would spend any amount of time at all giving you advice: because they'd like you to be a better writer. If you don't want to be a better writer, then don't write. If you feel it's your passion and you can't go without doing it, then strive to do it better and start by taking people's advice. It's really very simple. You've got everything at your disposal to fix what needs fixing.

If you don't take the opportunity to make yourself better, then you deserve all the derision you get. And no, it wouldn't exist anyway. Quit hiding behind excuses. If you're going to do something, and we all know you're going to write, at least try to do it right.

You say you've changed your style many times and what you've got now is the end result of channeling all previous advice. That's a lie. What you've got now is you thinking that what you write is somehow meaningful and important and is a service to whoever reads it. It's not. You are not a writer and you are certainly no journalist. You're a hack because you choose to be a hack.

Choose not to be a hack. People obviously don't want you to be a hack, but you seem to want to stay one. Wait, I just looked up the definition of a hack and you aren't even up to that level yet, because according to dictionary.com, a hack is "A writer hired to produce routine or commercial writing." You produce painful drivel for free.

--Scourge .

Ah, that's amusing. Scourge, you get my PM?

Don't waste your time, Scourge.

*sighs

You suck at life.

So let me get this straight.

The only feedback you like is positive feedback.

Well too bad. Purely positive feedback teaches you nothing. And don't you tell me that the feedback you've been getting in these forums hasn't been constructive. We've told you time and time again that you're reviews are too long, and yet you've done nothing to correct the problem.

I can't make my advice to you more simple than that.

Once again, I will repeat my offer to you:

1. Rewrite this review using no more than 800 words, which (in MS Word) works out to a little more than a page single-spaced in Times New Roman 12-point.
2. I will then make some edits, complete with red marks and constructive criticism, and send it back to you via email.
3. As a bonus you'll get a free copy of Elements of Style, which if nothing else you can put on your desk to give people the impression that you've read it.

Do it. What have you got to lose? You'll certainly gain my respect, as well as that of many other people on this board.

I don't only like positive feedback, as I've said in the past, I enjoy constructive feedback. Also, I'll get around to rewriting the review when I get to it. I'm busy enough with other writing that HAS to get done, as well as other personal stuff which, as you can imagine, takes precedence over rewriting a review. Also, if MVS or Ninjas weren't so damned negative and hostile towards me all the time, I just might take something they say about my writing the least bit seriously.

They bash you because you're too fucking ignorant to anything they say, and so they get so fed up that future criticism becomes flaming. You've brought this shit upon yourself.