Shenmue II

[Jeremy]

Just be glad I don't post every review here that I do. There ARE folks on the board who enjoy my reviews, by the way.

[LOL]

Also, stop using tired cliches like "chomp at the bit" all the time. You abuse phrases like that to the point that they're bloody and breathless, holding one arm up in the air to try and grab back onto life.

Originally posted by Jeremy
There ARE folks on the board who enjoy my reviews, by the way.

Any of the two or three people that have said "that was a nice review, Jeremy" in the past would agree with the other 90% of the board that you need to improve and that you're acting like a douchebag to the dozens of people that have tried very hard to help you.

When it comes to the point that you say "Just be glad I don't post every review here that I do" and it comes off as a threat, you have to understand that you're terrible at this.

[Rich]

Originally posted by omfgninjas

When it comes to the point that you say "Just be glad I don't post every review here that I do" and it comes off as a threat, you have to understand that you're terrible at this.

It is a threat! If he posted all his reviews, we would have to stop coming to this forum.

[Scourge]

Originally posted by Jeremy
2. Just because I don't USE the advice doesn't mean I don't think about using it. I usually just can't think of how, or where in the piece, to use it.

Jeremy, you are a liar. If you can't figure out how to put people's advice to use then stop writing. But that's honestly not the case and you know it, because that's tantamount to you saying you are too stupid. No one here buys it, but plenty of us are more than happy to exploit you acting as though it's the case.

Remember when I edited your GTA: VC review after you posted it in the FC MVS vs Jemery contest? All I did was remove words and rearrange paragraphs and it went from 3050 words to 1000 and retained 90+% of all ideas and opinions you had on the game.

TNL's Writing Advice to Jeremy:

Point #1

Remove all unnecessary words.

Point #2

Don't use cliches.

If you seriously strive to do just those two things, your writing will improve by about 50%. Start with your Shenmue II review and cut it to 800 words. Stop being difficult and weasly about it. If you're going to act so 'all important' that you've got much more pressing writing to do, then please refrain from posting any new reviews here until you've fixed this last one.

--Scourge .

[Jeremy]

Scourge, I planned on "fixing" this review before posting future ones anyway. Also, my saying I've got other pieces of writing to do ahead of revising this one isn't meant as an "all important" statement, I've got other writing assignments with a deadline that have to get done.
Ninjas, I was referring to folks who praised my stuff after this whole thing on this review came about, and actually enjoyed this review.

[Andy]

Originally posted by Jeremy
They've spent many pages before that doing the same thing.
1. I appreciate most of the folks who have taken the time out to offer me advice on my reviews.
2. Just because I don't USE the advice doesn't mean I don't think about using it. I usually just can't think of how, or where in the piece, to use it.

My super-huge post in Sleeveboy's thread (yes, a post by me OVER one word, I'm as shocked as you are) sums up everything else. As I've said to a few folks via IMs/PMs, I'm not happy with this review as it is since I still left quite a few things out of it. I'll be re-writing it somewhere down the line, probably during the week.

Holy shit! New sig!

[Jeremy]

That is a fantabulous new sig, Andy.

[Scourge]

Originally posted by Andy
Holy shit! New sig!

Yeah, I thought about doing that, but passed. Missed opportunities I guess... Good luck with the new sig you thieving bastard.



--Scourge .

[Jeremy]

Don't get discouraged man, there's bound to be at least one quote from me in this topic that can be used as a substitute.

[LOL]

Maybe you haven't realized it, but acting like you're our friend and saying "hehe, you guys are funny" when we insult you only makes AFX's past negative impersonation of you entirely accurate.

You're better off not posting anything ever again, as trying to join in on the fun only makes you come off as more obnoxious and irritating than you already are.

Ninjas, I was referring to folks who praised my stuff after this whole thing on this review came about, and actually enjoyed this review.

Who? They certainly aren't posting in this thread, since a scan of this thread reveals nine pages of nothing but unanimous criticism.

By the way, that last comma in your quote is grammatically incorrect.